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This week’s snippet is from my wip Star Struck. Our hero has just met our heroine for the first time.
She was even more stunning up close—her long hair a mess of auburn waves and curls falling down to the middle of her back. Small twigs and little flecks of grass sprouted from her head as if she’d barrel-rolled down a tall hill on her way to him. She wore a long, flowing sundress and sandals that looked like she should be on the beaches of Maui instead of in the middle of Central Park.
“Sorry,” she said. Her gaze met his and he could tell instantly that her eyes were most likely her best feature, even if he couldn’t make out the color. There was a quality about them that captivated him, making it impossible to break her gaze.
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Kerrianne says:
August 14, 2011 at 8:42 am (UTC -4 )
A really nice six… I want more! xx
Taryn Kincaid says:
August 14, 2011 at 8:57 am (UTC -4 )
Great description.
Alix says:
August 14, 2011 at 9:05 am (UTC -4 )
Fantastic descriptive six. I love he is caught in the gaze. Thank you.
Sandi Sookoo says:
August 14, 2011 at 9:46 am (UTC -4 )
cute description. Love the “barrel roll” comment lol
Lisa Fox says:
August 14, 2011 at 10:15 am (UTC -4 )
Great description! I can totally see her.
Gem Sivad says:
August 14, 2011 at 10:28 am (UTC -4 )
Sweet description and she does sound captivating. Great six!
charmaine gordon says:
August 14, 2011 at 11:17 am (UTC -4 )
dynamite, Heather. Good six.
Layna Pimentel says:
August 14, 2011 at 11:23 am (UTC -4 )
Love the description her Heather. Great job!
Suzie Quint says:
August 14, 2011 at 12:11 pm (UTC -4 )
Love that she’s sprouting twigs and grass. Great image.
Jessica Subject says:
August 14, 2011 at 12:33 pm (UTC -4 )
Wonderful description! If he’s captivated by her eyes, he’s in trouble. LOL
Jessica Knauss says:
August 14, 2011 at 1:34 pm (UTC -4 )
Wonderful description — entrancing and with a touch of humor.
Marie Dees says:
August 14, 2011 at 2:22 pm (UTC -4 )
Nice description. Love the details with the grass. That made it for me.
Dee Carney says:
August 14, 2011 at 2:30 pm (UTC -4 )
Love the way he’s instantly smitten. So sweet.
Lex Valentine says:
August 14, 2011 at 2:33 pm (UTC -4 )
Love the grass part. LOL
Liz Culver says:
August 14, 2011 at 3:53 pm (UTC -4 )
Nicely written moment – very visual. Great six.
Janet Lane Walters says:
August 14, 2011 at 4:16 pm (UTC -4 )
Good sentences. Do like your cover. I’m finally nearly caught up with where I should be in time and space/
Sandy Nachlinger says:
August 14, 2011 at 5:54 pm (UTC -4 )
I really enjoyed your description, especially “barrel rolled down a tall hill.” Your six sentences made me want to know more about this unusual woman!
Jennifer Lowery (Kamptner) says:
August 14, 2011 at 7:07 pm (UTC -4 )
Great six! Loved the ‘barrel rolled’! Thanks for sharing!
Vivien Dean says:
August 14, 2011 at 8:09 pm (UTC -4 )
Based on that description, it’s easy to see why she might captivate him.
Laura Kaye says:
August 14, 2011 at 9:27 pm (UTC -4 )
Very sweet meet!
Cheryl M. says:
August 15, 2011 at 10:42 am (UTC -4 )
Love the vivid description of her hair. Being a bit of a mess makes her more real. Love it.
Lucy Felthouse says:
August 15, 2011 at 12:33 pm (UTC -4 )
Brilliant descriptive six, well done 🙂
E. Jamie says:
August 20, 2011 at 12:32 pm (UTC -4 )
Lovely six!